Through life we all go older and older learn more and more.I still am young so there are more adventures and knowledge that the world holds and what I don't know about.
In my coming of age have went through experience like graduating from intermediate. Then entering high school with no sense of what is ahead of me. Well went I graduated I felt kind of happy to leave that school but also sad. Cause one most of your friends who new for years are going to leave you to go to another high school. Then there is HIGH SCHOOL!!!
When I was at my old school I was happy to come to a new school and meet new people. I didn't believe in what they said in the movies about high school. About different group of people. The freshman being treated badly and the upper class man pick on them. When I first stepped foot on the school campus. I felt good and positive but as the weeks went by I learned more and more about how the system work here. The are different groups of people. It is like a jungle or forest. See there are us in coming freshman who are the little cubs while the people who school are either nice people(zebras and giraffes) the simple and lay back(pandas) people who do outrageous things(baboons) and the mean and scary people(lions, tiger, and bears).
But all and all the High School is good after freshman year. You feel more powered over the freshman. You know more people than those you knew from middle school. You have some popularity statics. Well YA!!!! Hope you like my Coming Of Age essay draft.
ok sassy first of all i like all the jungle stuff its kind of funny..
ReplyDeleteyou so tho includ dialog in your essay to show but not tell how your coming of age related to you. so like talk about personal experiences.
also grammer there was classmen is one word so in the third paragraph i believe it was. and also system work should be system works.
other then that over all good essay but try and include alot of detail when you show your personal experiences.
GO BASEBALL
AUstin
along with austins comment haha it is funny. i like the animals you chose to relate people to haha yea i thought classmen was one word and with a E not a A . well i thought your essay was funny in a good way hah it was good though.
ReplyDeletegood job!