Not taken lightly
Stormy,violent nature at times
Earthshaker or the Husband of the Earth
With my Iron Trident
As I ruled the open seas
Giving life moisture to creatures and humans
keeping the safety of sailors
As people disobey and attack my home
I must do all to protect it
Releasing horrendous sea monster in there path
Gigantic waves,storms,earthquakes
Such Great Power at my hands
is my Great Responsibility
I am the God of the Sea
Hey Kelvin[= So i see that your doing the God of Water, Posideon? And i thought that this allusive poem was to compare yourself to a type of person not write a poem about them0___o
ReplyDeleteFirst off all picking Posideon matches you. He is known to be strong, huge, and fearless like you are. But i don't think you did your poem correctly0__0 you started off pretty well witht he first 2 lines "strong and fearless...not taken lightly" but then you go off into detail about Posideon and not you as a comparison to him. Your poem sounds good but interpret yourself in the poem, not just Posideon. Aight?:D
Kelvin-
ReplyDeleteWazzuh Big dawg, I think that besides your poem having some grammatical errors, you need to focus on improving on your sentence fluency. Also what cynthia said, you have to make a stronger comparison because I'm pretty sure you don't literally "Give life moisture to creatures and humans" or "keep the safety of sailors". Anyway overall this has the potential to be a great poem as long as you connect yourself with Poseidon a little better.
Hi Kelvin,
ReplyDeleteAnd congratulations for being one of the first to post! As your teammates have said, you did a good job of characterizing Posideon, but you need to connect the allusion more closely with your own character.
Nice job on the final graphic, with the addition of your own image.
mrs s