University of Washington,HUSKIES
Wow I don't know where to start. It was just like yesterday I graduated from middle school, a freshman joining high school, and now I really feel like I stepped in to a new world. Also for all the adults and students in high school I bet you that you had so many questions on what will you do for the rest of your life. Well I guess reality for everyone out there we you get to college and then get a job.
Over your lifetime you look for something that either inspires to do or the most important thing to you in the world. Even maybe something you would give up for even 1 MILLION DOLLARS(Well not so much). But mine is Football I mean I may not be the best at it I love it. If you ever when to a game of NFL, College , High School, or even Pop Warner it is still exhilarating even when the team makes a score or you just cheers for the other team. Especially when your on the team working day in and day out. Then game day comes when you have that nervous feeling, but as you get on the field either cheering for them or playing in the game you feel that everything is silent in your silent in head all you hear is" Lets Go Team" and coaches yelling at you. As the play starts 4 and 5 yards to the touchdown 10 seconds on the clock championship game. (Goodness I am getting pumped up even writing this cause I hope you are). Boom!!! You feeling invincible and the QB looking for and opening and finds you open then with the WINNING TOUCHDOWN!!! AMAZING RIGHT!
But in life there is a time of just studying such as Final Exams which make you nervous to I mean I may not love it as much as football but hey I and get a good education any day. Doing work to keep your grades up plus studying to. It is also a essential for football. Without the Grades where the playing time. Not Pain No Gain when I come to homework for me. I just try my best in my work to.
From all of this I relate myself to the weather I maybe the hot sunny days from being intense in football games, you know 4th and long. To cheerful with my jokes in my essay. There is the lighting and thunder where ever thing is serious following with Final Exams and studying.
Well I hope you like my essay until then which ever college is reading this enjoy.
Hi Kelvin,
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If it was to compare yourself to something, then that weather metaphor needs to start earlier in the essay and be much better developed.
If, however, you are comparing life to football (which would work nicely) then drop the weather part and concentrate on better development of the life = football part.
Whichever one you choose, I highly recommend outlining first. A comparison essay (which is what this seems to be) needs to be very well planned and organized. To insure that your comparison is complete and well supported, list your points and evidence ahead of time and then write.
Let me know if you have questions.
mrs s
good job "king size kelvin" haha i like how you say you always put your grades before football. i thought you would write about football hah.
ReplyDeletewell i can see football relating to you and all in all good essay
Tat was a good essay Sassy. I liked all the football detait because it really shows how you are and what you like. How ever you do hve some grammar things in the second paragraph so you might wannah check that out. There was good flow going from football to academics so that was good as well. Good essay and good luck.
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